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The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visited different museums in London.

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The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visited different museums in London.
The given bar chart illustrates the
number
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 of visitors in the United Kingdom who
visits
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visit
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 different museums with their families.
Overall
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, the most popular
museum
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 was
British
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the British
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museum
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Museum
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,
while
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 the least popular was
National
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the National
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museum
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Museum
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 among individuals.
The
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There
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 is an upward trend in exploring
History
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the History
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museum
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 as the figure decreased
at the end
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 of
months
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the month
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. In detail, the highest
number
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 of people who went to
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Science
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the Science
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museum
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 were 405000
as
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, as
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 the figure of British
and
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Museum and
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National
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the National
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 was slightly lower than
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Science
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those for the Science
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.
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Museum.
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However
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, 200,000 individuals visit the National
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museum
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Museum
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 in June. In July, exactly 400,000 residents
enjoy
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enjoyed
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 the trip to
History
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the History
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museum
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 as the ratio increased remarkably in August.
Whereas
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, there is a decline in the
number
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 of visitors in National and
science
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museum
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museums
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. As for more, the
number
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 of people
were
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was
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 580000 in September
who
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, who
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 visits British
museum
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 as the figure fell significantly in December.
Moreover
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, History, National and
Science
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also
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 experienced
less
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fewer
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 visitors
in contrast
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 to September.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, museum, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • museum attendance
  • the number of visitors
  • the most popular museum
  • the least popular museum
  • attract the highest number of visitors
  • receive fewer visitors
  • be ranked first
  • be followed by
  • in contrast
  • a significant difference
  • a small gap
  • approximately
  • respectively
  • account for
  • visitor total
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