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The charts below show the percentage of time used for different activities in the offices in the US in 1980 adn 2006.

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two
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 pie charts compare the proportion of time used for different activities in the office in the US in
two
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 years (1980 and 2006).
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,
it is clear that
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 out of six figures showed an upward trajectory throughout the period,
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 others experienced a decrease
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 the given years. It is
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 evident that
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 using
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 had the highest
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 in the initial year,
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 using
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computer
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computers
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 witnessed the most dramatic growth among other categories. In detail, the share of talking with colleagues accounted for 17% in 1980, compared with 12% for using
telephone
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.
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, both of these figures experienced the same pattern, where talking with colleagues decreased slightly to 9% by the end of the timeframe.
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,
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the use of the
 telephone fell steadily by 4
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points
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, to 8% over a 26-year gap.
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, formal
meeting
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meetings
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 remained stable at 14% in both periods.
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this
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 trend, the remaining categories,
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using
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computer
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a computer
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, using paper
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, using email, and other things,
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 out of four experienced an increase.
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, using email appeared in 2006, with only 3%.
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, other things stood at 15% by 1980, but
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 was followed by a
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points
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, to 16% by 2006. Meanwhile, there was a huge difference of 28
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percentage
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 between using
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computer
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computers
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 and using paper
documents
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 at the beginning of the period, at 7% and 35%, respectively.
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, using paper
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 fell moderately to 15% by 2006,
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 using
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computers
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 surged by 28
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points
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, to 35%over a 26-year span.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words two, documents, percentage, computer, points with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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