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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where reevant.

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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where reevant.
The
two
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 assigned layouts compared the
road
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access
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 to a city hospital for
staff
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 and the general population in the
year
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 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, the
car
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park
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,
bus
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 station and establishment of
two
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round abouts
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roundabouts
 were the outstanding features distinguishing between the
two
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 maps. The location of the city hospital was
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, however
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however
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 consistent with the map of 2007. The major distinction between
2007
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the 2007
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 and 2010 city hospital
map
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 was the improvised layout with separate
car
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 parks for the
staff
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 and general public. The
car
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park
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 was divided into
two
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, where the public
car
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park
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 went
west
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 to east.
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Staff
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The staff
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car
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park
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 was located at the same place
with
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as the
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bus
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station
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station,
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 situated on the opposite side
and
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 both were partitioned by the
two
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 roundabouts at the hospital entrance. The
bus
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 station was linked to the
two
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 roundabouts , one at the entrance and the other a little
further
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 on the hospital
road
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in
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, in
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2010
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2010,
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whereas
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 in 2007, the
bus
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 stop was situated at either side of the hospital
road
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. The
access
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 to
hospital
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the hospital
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 for
staff
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 and
public
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the public
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 was changed
where
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, where
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 the
staff
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 could
access
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 the hospital from
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 and the public could
access
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 it from
ring
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the ring
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road
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 entrance.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, road, access, staff, car, park, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road access
  • the surrounding road network
  • traffic flow
  • a major redevelopment
  • be redesigned
  • be replaced by
  • be converted into
  • be relocated
  • be constructed
  • be added at the junction
  • a roundabout
  • a bus station
  • bus stops
  • a hospital entrance
  • a staff car park
  • a public car park
  • a separate parking area
  • an access road
  • be connected to
  • on the northern side of
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