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You were doing a short course in another country. Suddenly, you had to leave the country and return to your home country. Write a letter to your teacher. In your letter: 1. Express your gratitude 2. Explain why you had to leave the course early 3. Describe what part of the course you enjoyed the most

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Dear Mr Hashemi, I am writing to express my unparalleled gratitude for the
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 I took with you at university, which was an unforgettable and enjoyable experience. I
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 firmly believe that the
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 was one of the most informative courses I have had during my life. Unfortunately, I had to leave the
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, as my mother is suffering from a serious heart attack, and I should look after her, especially since she is now at hospital. So, I am not able to continue the
course
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, and I am really sorry for the situation. What captivated me most about the
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 was the part of the
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, which was aimed at integrating medical science with artificial intelligence.
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 area is particularly my favourite science because I want to develop software helping patients manage their medications more conveniently
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 providing them with detailed information about healthy meals. Thank you for your consideration and time. Yours sincerely, Mohammadreza Hadavi Bavil

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task response
Answer all three points well, but make the reason for leaving more clear. You could say that your mother had a heart attack and is in hospital, so you had to return home to care for her.
task response
Use more natural words for the course. Instead of “unparalleled gratitude”, write “thank you very much”. Also, “my favourite field” is better than “my favourite science”.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear order: thanks, reason for leaving, and the part you liked. Add a short link such as “I was especially interested in...” to make the last paragraph flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating “course” too often in the first and last paragraphs. Use “it”, “the class”, or “this subject” where clear.
coherence and cohesion
Keep sentences short when giving important news. For example: “My mother has had a serious heart attack. She is in hospital, so I need to look after her.”
task response
You clearly thank the teacher, explain your early return, and say which part of the course you enjoyed most.
coherence and cohesion
Your greeting, closing, and paragraph order are suitable for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraph about medical science and AI gives a clear personal reason for your interest.
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