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the two maps below show road access to a city in 2007 and in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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the two maps below show road access to a city in 2007 and in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The maps
displays
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display
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 information about
road
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 access to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, there are significant changes to the hospital
road
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 and
public's
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the public's
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 access to the carpark. A specific
bus
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 station was
structured
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established
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 in 2010. In 2007, there was only a single car park which was shared by
public
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the public
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 and
staff
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the staff
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 of the city hospital,
while
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 in 2010
there was constructed a separated carpark
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, a separate car park was constructed
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 for
public
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the public
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 on the east side of the hospital
and
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 the staff parking
is
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remained unchanged.
Along with
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 that, in 2007 there were three
of
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bus
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 stop in both sides of the hospital
road
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which
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 later in 2010, a specific
bus
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 station was
builded
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built
 on the western side of hospital
road
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.
Additionally
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, there were
a
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very noticeable changes on roads, the construction of roundabouts to make
easier
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it easier
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 to access
to
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the
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 Ring
road
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,
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Bus
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the bus
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 station,
city
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the city
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road
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 and
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 in 2010.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road access
  • city hospital
  • traffic flow
  • public transport facilities
  • intersection
  • roundabout
  • car park
  • dedicated
  • modifications
  • congestion
  • accessibility
  • hospital entrance
  • parking areas
  • main features
  • signage
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