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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or to work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason s why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
Nowadays, more people are learning a foreign
language
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 to use in their daily life
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 of using it to travel or to
work
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 abroad. I believe that the real reason to learn a foreign
language
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 is to use it in a foreign country.
Body paragraph 1
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 hand, there are several reasons why
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 the
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 of somebody's new direction country would
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 him a successful visit or a new start there.
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, foreign languages help visitors know
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the culture
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 by presenting real-life tours and
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communication
 with locals.
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,
work
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 seekers achieve adaptation through the
language
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2025,
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 the Immigration authority in Canada released new requirements for new arrivals through immigration programmes
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 be
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accepted,
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 you must
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prove
 at least
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 year of experience
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highest
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the highest
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 band score in
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 and
french
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French
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 tests will guarantee the selection.
Body paragraph 2
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 the other hand, learning boosts
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 awareness significantly in teenagers, helping them to
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 teachers.
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, academic literature
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 creative solutions by presenting new ideas, allowing business owners to develop other business sides through international relations.
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, some business owners buy new machines, fix the recent issue, and plan realistic goals.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 a new
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 can reinforce travel and
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 opportunities, it
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 add value to businesses and help upcoming teachers to be creative.
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I believe
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 opportunity.

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task response
Discuss both views more fully. Explain why travel and work can be strong reasons, then explain other reasons, such as study, family, books, films, and online life.
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Make your own view clear from the start. Your first paragraph says travel and work are the real reason, but the end also says language can help business and teachers. State which view you support and why.
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Use examples that clearly support each main point. The Canada example is useful, but make it shorter and explain how it shows that language is needed for work or life there.
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Develop the second view with clear links. For example, say how learning a language helps teachers, business owners, or students, and give one clear real example for each idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, travel and work view, other reasons view, and conclusion. Keep one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body paragraph with a clear topic sentence. For example: “There are good reasons to learn a language for travel or work abroad.”
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words correctly: “First,” “Also,” “For example,” “However,” and “In conclusion.” Do not use “One the one hand”; use “On the one hand.”
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow because the ideas are not clear. Write shorter sentences and use simple words. Check that each sentence has a clear subject, verb, and meaning.
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You give an opinion and you try to discuss both sides of the question.
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You include an example about Canada, which shows an effort to use a real case.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two main body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking phrases, such as “Firstly,” “Furthermore,” “For example,” and “In conclusion.”
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
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