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Some psychologists think that the best way to overcome stress in everyday life is to spend a portion of the day doing absolutely nothing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
According to
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 some psycologists spending time with yourself and doing nothing is a great way to deal with stress. I completely agree
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 the fact that doing nothing can help your
mind
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relax
, calm down, and unwind from all the stress and tension in daily life.
Body paragraph 1
Taking a break by performing no physical activity can help destress your brain.
This
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 helps the
mind
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 to relax, unwind and forget all the tension related to daily life.
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, it is a great
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way to reboot your
mind
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 and help assimilate mental thoughts, which can boost your performance in the long run.
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, a quick breathing
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exercise
 every
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morning
 can help gather your
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 and increase your output.
Body paragraph 2
Additionally
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,
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 is good practice to improve your mental health. Spending some alone time leads to increased
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, better concentration, and strengthens your mental stability.
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reducing
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 health risks,
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 mental well- being and
help
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 lead a
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sedentary
 lifestyle.
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, a person with
relaxed
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a relaxed
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 and focused
mind
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 can deal with an issue in a better way
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 than someone who is stressed.
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Taking a small pause, whenever
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 can help improve
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 and lead to better performance.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I completely agree with
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 that taking a portion of your time to do nothing can help overcome stress by helping you reset your
mind
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 and
focus
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 properly.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first part, then keep the same view in each body part. Your answer agrees with the idea, but some points are repeated: rest helps the mind, focus, and work. Add one new reason, such as better sleep or less worry.
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Explain what “doing nothing” means. It could mean sitting quietly, breathing, or taking a short break without a phone. This will make your answer more exact.
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Make each example more full. Explain how a short breathing break helps a person feel less stressed, and how this then helps them work or deal with a problem.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end. To make the flow better, give each body part one main idea only. The first can be about rest for the mind; the second can be about how this helps daily work and health.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. “Moreover”, “Additionally”, and “Consequently” are useful, but the ideas after them must match. For example, doing nothing does not clearly lead to a “sedentary lifestyle”; this point should be removed or changed.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid a very short body-like sentence before the end: “Taking a small pause...” Put this idea into the second body part, or develop it with an example.
language accuracy
Check spelling and word forms: “psychologists”, “relax”, “exercise”, “morning”, “sedentary”, and “well-being”. Also write “agree with the statement”, not “agree to the fact”.
language accuracy
Use clear complete sentences. For example: “This can reduce health risks and improve mental well-being.” The current sentence starting with “Consequently” is not a full sentence.
task response
You answer the question directly and clearly show that you agree.
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You give useful ideas about rest, focus, and dealing with daily problems.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction, body parts, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words, such as “Moreover”, “For example”, and “In conclusion”, to guide the reader.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mental overload
  • burnout
  • cognitive fatigue
  • rejuvenate
  • mindfulness
  • self-awareness
  • emotional regulation
  • active stress-relief techniques
  • balanced approach
  • stress management methods
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