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Human activities over the period of time have increased global warming. What are the primary causes? What solutions can you suggest?

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Introduction
Global warming has become
universally
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 agreed social agenda, as an outcome of climate change, or precisely climate disruption. The causation of
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 a phenomenon is complex, with the
primay
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primary
 contributor- human activities, especially the process of
industrialization
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.
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 the population growth and the economic transitioning from agriculture or mining industry to heavy
manufactury
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manufacturing
 in
developping
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developing
countries
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, particularly those with bigger economy entity
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 as China, Brazil, and some other Asian
countries
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, the growing combustion of fossil fuel is inevitable. The outcome of fossil fuel consumption is
emmision
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emission
 of CO2, which is the primary
composition
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component
 of
green house
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greenhouse
 gas. It is one of the main causes of global warming.
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, the diminishing forest and vegetation on the planet is another contributor
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 global warming.
Industrilisation
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Industrialisation
 deprives green land and forest for manufacturing and building power plants.
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, environmental pollution
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 contributes to global warming.
Body paragraph 1
I believe there
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 no solutions or
cure
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 for global warming, but rather, there may be
resolution
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a resolution
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 for global warming which requires the collaboration of global
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organisations
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 and
countries
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,
universally
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 agreed policy and agreement, and effective/supervised implementation. We cannot halt the economic transitioning of
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developing
countries
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, as it is
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 essential stage to superior civilisation, and we
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expect
 the advanced technology may reduce those contributing factors to global warming,
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 as using clean energy, sustainable farming, and preservation of green space
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 economic growth. In Australia, the government has successfully launched
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 to
mediate
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 the impact of environmental disruption,
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 as the "net zero" program.
Conclusion
In summary,
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industrialisation
 may be an inevitable stage of developing
countries
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, but there are effective
straegies
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strategies
 that can reduce the tension of
economy
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economic
 growth and global ecology.

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Answer both parts in a more direct way. Give a short list of main causes, then give a short list of clear solutions.
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Explain each cause more fully. For example, say that burning coal, oil, and gas puts more CO2 into the air, which traps heat.
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Make the third cause clearer. “Environmental pollution” is too wide and repeats the idea of gas from fuel. Use a different cause, such as farming, waste, or cutting down trees.
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Give more detail for each solution. Say who should act, what they should do, and how this can cut global warming.
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The Australia example is useful, but explain what the net zero plan does, such as cutting gas from power, travel, and business.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end. Keep this plan, but use one paragraph for causes and one paragraph for solutions.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links to guide the reader: “The first cause is…”, “Another cause is…”, “To deal with this…”, and “Finally…”.
coherence and cohesion
Some long sentences have too many ideas. Break them into two or three short sentences so the meaning is easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating “global warming” many times. You can sometimes use “this problem” or “this change” instead.
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You discuss both causes and solutions, so the reader can see that you have answered the full question.
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You give relevant main ideas, including fossil fuels, loss of forests, clean energy, farming, and green space.
coherence and cohesion
The opening gives the main topic, and the final paragraph brings the main ideas together.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “Secondly”, “Thirdly”, and “In summary” help show the order of your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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