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The internet has made possible for everybody to read anything online for free. This will make it unnecessary to pay for printed materials such as books or newspapers in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
While
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 the
internet
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expended
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has expanded
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 over the years, nowadays, it is possible for everybody to read anything online for free.
In contrast
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,
this
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 will make it unnecessary to pay for printed materials
such
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 as books or newspapers.
Body paragraph 1
I widely agree with
this
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 statement. Personally, I assume that printed materials will
get
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become
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 less common in the future.
Body paragraph 2
The major reason for
this
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 digitalization
.
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 The development of the
internet
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leaded
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led
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 nearly every individual to buy a smartphone, laptop, tablet or
e-book
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 reader. With those
tools
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tools,
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 they get
accesses
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access
 to the
internet
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 everywhere at any time.
This
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 is a major reason
,
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apply
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 why printed materials will get less common. The need for
a
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apply
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printed newspapers disappears. Mostly because printed newspapers
representing
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represent
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 what happened the day before.
In contrast
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, the
internet
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 gives information with nearly no time difference. There will be no reason for the public to buy a printed newspaper
,
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 if the
internet
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 keeps them up-to-date without any payments.
Body paragraph 3
Also
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, another main argument for
this
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 statement
,
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 is
that
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is
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it is
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 more
practicable
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practical
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.
Book
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The book
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 will be replaced by
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e-book
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an e-book
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, because it is easier to take them somewhere.
For example
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,
while
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traveling
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travelling
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.
Instead
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 of bringing four books, it isn't that heavy to bring an
e-book
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 reader or tablet.
The most
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Most
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 digital tools, listed above, are thin and lightweight.
As a result
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, it
dosen't
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doesn't
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 take much space to read a book or newspaper. On top of
this
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, and
also
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 beside the fact
,
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 that it is cheaper to buy an
e-book
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, the population
already
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has already
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 reduced and replaced paper for sustainable reasons over the
last
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years
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few years
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. Studies already showed
,
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apply
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 that the paperless development had a noticeable impact
to stop
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on stopping
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 deforestation and harming the environment.
Conclusion
Therefore
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, in my opinion, paperless options will continue to be the most common way to read.

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task response
Make your main view more exact. You agree, but say if you agree fully or only in part. You can say that news on paper may fall, but some people may still buy books.
task response
Explain each main point more fully. For example, say why some books on paper may still be wanted: people may like to own them, give them as gifts, or read them without a screen.
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Use real, clear examples. You could talk about a person who reads news on a phone each day, or a student who takes many e-books on a trip.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear plan: opening with your view, one body part about news, one body part about books, then a short end. This will make the answer easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body part with one clear main idea. For example: “Online news is faster than paper news.” Then give reasons and an example.
coherence and cohesion
Use link words with care. “In contrast” is not right in some places because the next idea is not the opposite. Use “also”, “because”, “for example”, or “as a result” when they fit.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid short sentence parts such as “The major reason for this digitalization.” Write a full sentence: “The main reason is the growth of digital tools.”
task response
You give a clear view and stay on the topic of online reading and paper reading.
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Your points about fast online news, light e-book tools, and less paper use are useful and fit the question.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an opening, two main body parts, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use some helpful link words, such as “For example”, “In contrast”, and “As a result”.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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