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A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment? Explain your position.

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Introduction
A xompany declare that they hope to build a
arge
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large
factory
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 close
my
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to my
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localiy
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locality
is
a
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an
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 important
things
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thing
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.
This
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budimg
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building
 may bring both advantages and disadvantages
of
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to
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 my community .But mostly ,the
pros
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 has mre than cons. But the cons
has
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have
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 more than
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pros
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the pros
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 ,so
i am
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I do
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 not agree to support
company
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the company
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 to build.
Body paragraph 1
Building a large
factory
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 has
a
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an
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 obvious damage for my community,
that is
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 pollution.
Firstly
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,
build
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building
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 a big
factory
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has
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will
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 bring a lot of dust ,
it
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which
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 may come
in to
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into
 the area
that
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where
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 residents
in
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live
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 and lead the
problem
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 of breath heath Breath has not only a weak
heathy
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health
problem
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 that
human
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humans
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 have
,
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;
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 in extreme situatin
this
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problem
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 may cause death.
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, in
2022
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2022,
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 there is news frrom BBC ,
t
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which
 shows a family who live close to the place are in processing for cnstruction has got healthy disease .But
this
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menber
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member
 from
this
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 family is
luckey
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lucky
 that he has discover instantly
so
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, so
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that
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apply
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he
haven't
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hasn't
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 have big
problem
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.But not all the residents can
disover
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discover
 the issue on time ,
this
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 action of
company
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the company
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 may
cuase
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cause
 a serious issue .
Secondly
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,
i th
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in the
 process of building
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factory
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a factory
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 ,it would cause noise
pllution
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pollution
.The
victim
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victims
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 are
stil
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still
 the residents wholive near the place
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. Lastly,
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Last
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 the poisonous gas
,
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apply
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ay
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may
 damage the ecological
enviroment
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environment
 there.So
buld
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building
 a big
factory
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 may cause different
kind
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kinds
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 of pollution to
people
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 and enviroment there.
Body paragraph 2
However
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,
build
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building
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 a
bid factiry
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factory
 shows that the place has
probability
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the potential
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 to develop,whatever type
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factory
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of factory
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that
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the
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 company want to
buid
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build
 there, it shows that the locality
wuld
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would
 produce
item
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items
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 or another development in technology.
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This
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These
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 two aspects
both can
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can both
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 facilitate
the
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apply
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economic development and
city
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 location in a
cuntyr
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country
 or even
whole
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the whole
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 world.
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 ,in
China
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China,
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 the
city
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 GuiZhou
have
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has
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 many
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factory
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factories
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 that produce alcohol,
after
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and after
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 the alcohol
has
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is produced,
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 most
people
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to
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apply
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follow. GuZhou has actract any
people
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cme
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to come
 to
this
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city
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 and taste it.
This
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 action has indirect promote the
tourst
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tourism
 industry.And
finally
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prmote
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promote
 the
ecnomic
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economy
 of
this
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city
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.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
build
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building
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 a large
factiry
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factory
 may bring both
pros
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 and cons ,but the
diaadvantages
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disadvantages
 still more than
pros
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. So ,in my
position
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position,
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 I
am
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do
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 not support compay build a large
factory
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 near
locality
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the locality
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 .But if
this
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factory
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has carry
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carries
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 a significant reason like to
promte
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promote
city
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 economic development or technology,it should be
support
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supported
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 by
people
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.

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State one clear view in the first part and keep it to the end. You first say that the good points are more, but then say that the bad points are more. Choose one side and explain it.
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Answer all parts in a clear way: good points, bad points, and your own view. You do this, but the last sentence makes your view less clear because you say people should support the factory in some cases.
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Give fuller support for each main point. For example, explain how jobs, better roads, or more money for local shops could help people. Then explain how dust, noise, and gas could harm people and the land.
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Use examples that clearly prove your point. The BBC example is hard to follow and has too few details. Give a simple, clear example from a town or from daily life.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: first part for your view, one part for bad points, one part for good points, and a final part for your answer.
coherence and cohesion
Start each main part with a clear topic sentence. For example: “The main problem is air pollution.” Then keep the rest of that part on this one idea.
coherence and cohesion
Put ideas in a clear order. In the first main part, separate dust, noise, and harmful gas into short, clear points. This will make the reader understand your meaning more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully: “First,” “Also,” “However,” “For example,” and “In conclusion.” Do not use “Secondly” and “Last” without a clear list.
coherence and cohesion
Make the last part match your main view. If you oppose the factory, say this clearly and give one final reason. Do not add a new opposite view at the end unless you explain it well.
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You discuss both good and bad effects of the factory, and you give your own view.
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You use ideas that are linked to the topic, such as pollution, health, jobs, city growth, and tourism.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a beginning, two main parts, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use signpost words such as “Firstly,” “However,” “For example,” and “In conclusion.”
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local economy
  • economic activity
  • employment opportunities
  • infrastructure
  • environmental impact
  • ecosystems
  • traffic congestion
  • property values
  • industrial aesthetic
  • rejuvenate
  • quality of life
  • pollution
  • wildlife habitats
  • suppliers
  • contractors
  • influx
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