The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrate about favorite subjects of two secondary
school
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students
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.
Overall
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,
Both
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both
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schools had taken
same
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the same
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number of
students
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for
this
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survay
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survey
.
Amoung
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Among
them
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them,
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science
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is the least favourite
subject
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of the
students
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,
while
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sports
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has
largest
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the largest
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share.
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However
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However,
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School
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A
students
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mostly engage with
sports
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all
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; all
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other subjects has comparitively lower
engadement
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engagement
. Mainly, there
is a
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are
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three popular
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subject
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subjects
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that
has
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have
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over 20
student
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students
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. Which are
sports
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carft/drawings
and
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, and
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language studies. Even though
sports
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has total
41
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of 41
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individual popularity
36
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, 36
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of them came
form
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from
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school
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A
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while
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, while
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school
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B
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only marked 5 votes.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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School
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B
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has 25
student who's favorite
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students whose favourite
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subject
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became
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craft and drawning only 4
students
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voted form
school
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A. Similar to crafts Language studies
also
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follows
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follow
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the same trend. Eighteen
students
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from
school
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B
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were select languages as there favorite
subject
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only
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; only
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five
students
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selected
this
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subject
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.
Conversely
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, Social
science
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and
Science
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became the least
favorite
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favourite
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subjects in general.
While
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School
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B
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has 10
students
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,
School
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A only finds 6
students
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who like that
subkect
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subject
.
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Finally
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Finally,
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science
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has only 11
students
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from both schools marked as
thire faviorite
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their favourite
subject
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. Two out
form
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of
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eleven, student from
school
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B
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marked
as
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apply
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their
favoirt
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favourite
subject
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.
This
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number has become the lowest figure that any
subject
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got.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, students, science, subject, sports, b with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
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