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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
The line chart illustrates the
number
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 of travellers who visited
Australia
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 in the years between 1975 and 2005, and the table compares the numbers of
visitors
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 to six different regions for the years 1975 and 2005.
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, the line graph shows that the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who travelled to
Australia
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 had grown dramatically in 30 years, and we can see that in the year of 1975 and 2005, the main source of
visitors
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 was Japanese. The line graph shows that there were only 10
million
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 people who visited
Australia
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 in 1975,
then
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 the
number
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 increased to 15
million
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 in just a decade.
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, the
number
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 rose to 25
million
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 in 1995, and in 2005, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 was almost three times higher than that in 1975, with around 30
million
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 overseas residents travelling to
Australia
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. The table shows that there were 3.2
million
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 Japanese
visitors
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 to
Australia
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 in 1975 and 12
million
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 in 2005, which was the main source of tourists.
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, the second highest was Korean, 2.9
million
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 people had travelled to
Australia
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 in 1975 and 9.1
million
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 in 2005. The other four regions' visitor numbers were much lower than those of the two countries; there were only 1.1
million
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 Europeans, 0.3
million
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 Chinese, 0.4
million
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 US citizens and 0.9
million
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 Brithish visited; those numbers rose to 4.5
million
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, 0.8
million
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, 1.1
million
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 and 2.9
million
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 in 2005, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, australia, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual visits = visits each year
  • overseas residents = people who live in other countries
  • the number rose = the number went up
  • the figure fell = the number went down
  • increase sharply = go up fast
  • increase steadily = go up in a regular way
  • remain stable = stay the same
  • reach a peak = hit the highest point
  • source country = the country visitors came from
  • account for = make up
  • the largest group = the biggest group
  • the smallest group = the least big group
  • compared with = looked at next to
  • respectively = in the same order
  • overall = in general
  • throughout the period = during all these years
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