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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
The line chart illustrates the
number
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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 who visited
to
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apply
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Australia
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 in the years between 1975 and 2005, and the table compares 6 diffrent regions'
visitors
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number
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 for the
year
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years
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 1975 and 2005.
Overall
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, the line graph shows the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who
has
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have
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 travelled to
Australia
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grow
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has grown
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 dramatically in 30 years, and we can see that in the year of 1975 and
2005
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2005,
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 the main source of
the
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apply
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visitors
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were
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was
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 Japanese. The line graph shows
there
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that there
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 were only 10
million
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 people
visited
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who visited
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Australia
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 in 1975,
then
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 the
number
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 increased to 15
million
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 in just a decade.
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, the
number
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 rose to 25
million
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 in 1995, and in 2005 the
number
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 of
visitor
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visitors
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 was
alomst
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almost
 three times higher than that in 1975, around 30
million
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 overseas residents had travelled to
Australia
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. The table shows
there
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that there
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 were 3.2
million
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 Japanese
visitors
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had a journey in
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to
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Australia
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 in 1975 and 12
million
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 of them in 2005, which was the main source of
the
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apply
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tourists.
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, the second highest was Korean, 2.9
million
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 people had travelled to
Australia
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 in 1975 and 9.1
million
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 in 2005. The other four
region's
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regions'
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visitors
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number
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 were much
more
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apply
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lower than those
two
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of the two
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 countries; there were only 1.1
million
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European
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Europeans
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, 0.3
million
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 Chinese, 0.4
million
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US's citizen
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US citizens
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 and 0.9
million
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 Brithish visited; those
nubmer
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numbers
 rose to 4.5
million
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, 0.8
million
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, 1.1
million
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 and 2.9
million
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 in
2005
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2005,
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 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, australia, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual visits = visits each year
  • overseas residents = people who live in other countries
  • the number rose = the number went up
  • the figure fell = the number went down
  • increase sharply = go up fast
  • increase steadily = go up in a regular way
  • remain stable = stay the same
  • reach a peak = hit the highest point
  • source country = the country visitors came from
  • account for = make up
  • the largest group = the biggest group
  • the smallest group = the least big group
  • compared with = looked at next to
  • respectively = in the same order
  • overall = in general
  • throughout the period = during all these years
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