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Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter say how long you now want to rent the apartment for explain why your plans have changed tell the owner about a problem in the apartment You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ....................................,

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Dear Sharma, I am writing to ask whether I may extend the six-month lease on your apartment. I have been living there for the past five months, and I would like to stay until I finish my studies rather than leave when the current agreement ends. The apartment’s location near the university makes it very convenient for me. As it is only a five-minute walk away, I can get to my classes easily without needing to travel far each day. My plans changed because my friends have moved to other locations. When I signed the six-month agreement, I expected to move with them after completing one semester; now that they have gone
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, I would prefer to remain in the apartment. I
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 find the apartment spacious and
well equipped
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well-equipped
, which makes it a comfortable place to live
while
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 I study.
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, the Wi-Fi connection is unstable, and
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 makes it difficult to study online or complete my work reliably. Could you please arrange for the connection to be checked and repaired? I hope you will agree to extend my lease until my studies are finished. Please let me know whether
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 would be possible and what arrangements we would need to make. Yours faithfully, Nav

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Say the exact time you want to stay, such as one more year or until June 2027. “Until my studies are finished” is not clear enough.
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You answer all parts of the task well: you ask to stay longer, give a reason, and tell the owner about a problem.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order. Each main point has its own paragraph, so the letter is easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words well, such as “however” and “because”. You could use fewer long sentences to make the flow even smoother.
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The reason for your changed plan is clear and fits the letter well.
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Your request about the Wi-Fi is polite and clear.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, main body, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are suitable for a formal letter.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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