You have just moved into a new flat. Write a letter to your friend telling them tthat you have moved. In your letter: - describe the reason why you moved - describe the new flat - invite him or her to your new flat

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Dear Jane, I hope all is well. I'm writing
this
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to let you know that I've officially moved to a new apartment on Clark
street
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Street
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. I
believed
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believe
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that it's only 10 minutes away from your place
and
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, and
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I would like to invite you to my
house warming
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housewarming
party
this
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weekend. The driving force behind my relocation is
because of
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the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. Unlike my previous
accomodation
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accommodation
,
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new area is safer and cleaner since the homeless
is no where
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are nowhere
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to be found.
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, I got
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flat for a great price
compare
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compared
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to the market because I'm an old friend of the owner's daughter. When you come to my new place, you will be impressed by the big windows that allow lots of natural light to go inside. Another thing I love about it is the kitchen area, which has a double stove and a dishwasher.
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This
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amenities will allow me to easily host meals at home. If you're available
this
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Sunday morning, please come over and join my party. I will send you the address
though
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text message. I hope to
hearing
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hear
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from you soon. Warm wishes, Jules

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task response
Tell Jane a little more about why the new area is better for you. For example, say it is near your work, shops, or friends.
task response
Use kinder words when you talk about people in the old area. You can say the new area feels safer and cleaner to you.
coherence and cohesion
Put all points about why you moved in one part. Then start a new part to describe the flat. This will make the letter easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear links such as “Also”, “Because of this”, and “Finally” to show how your ideas go together.
coherence and cohesion
Make the invite more clear by giving the time and place in the letter, not only saying that you will send it later.
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You answer all the main parts: why you moved, what the flat is like, and an invite to your friend.
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The details about the big windows, kitchen, stove, and dishwasher help Jane see your new home.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. It is easy to see what each part is about.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and closing are warm and right for a letter to a friend.
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