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“Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

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Introduction
There is no denying the fact that many
people
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 these days communicate through email and messaging.
While
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 some
people
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 believe that modern forms of
communication
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 have a negative effect on social life, others think that they offer several benefits. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both points of view and express my opinion.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, there are some advantages to modern
communication
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 because it is easy to communicate with each other.
In addition
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,
people
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 can send emails, attend online meetings and contact others in less than a minute.
For example
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, if
people
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 have messages or important information, they can share it quickly. It
also
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 saves time and allows
people
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 to communicate over long distances.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, there are some disadvantages because
people
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 have less face-to-face
communication
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. It is
also
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 possible to say that
this
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 can negatively affect
people
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's health.
Moreover
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,
this
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 trend may lead to social isolation, which can be unhealthy.
For instance
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, mental health may suffer when
people
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 spend less time meeting their friends.
Therefore
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, face-to-face
communication
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 is still important.
Conclusion
In conclusion, there is no easy answer to
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 question.
However
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, on balance, I tend to believe that technology should not replace real relationships, and
people
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 should balance online and offline
communication
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 in their social lives.

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Task response
State your own view clearly in the introduction. You say you will discuss both views, but the question asks how far you agree or disagree. Say if you mostly agree, mostly disagree, or partly agree.
Task response
Give fuller reasons for your view. Explain why less time meeting friends can harm close ties, trust, and support. Then explain why email and messages may also help friends stay in touch.
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Use more real and clear examples. For example, say how friends who live far away can plan a visit by message, but may still feel less close if they only text.
Coherence and cohesion
Your four-part plan is clear: introduction, two main parts, and conclusion. Keep this plan, but make each main part support your answer to the question more directly.
Coherence and cohesion
Make the link between ideas clearer. For example, after saying that online contact saves time, add that this does not always mean people spend more time with friends in person.
Coherence and cohesion
Avoid broad lines such as “There is no easy answer.” Instead, repeat your clear final view in a direct way. This will make the ending stronger.
Coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. Words such as “however”, “therefore”, and “for example” are useful, but make sure the next idea truly follows from the one before it.
Task response
You cover both the good and bad sides of email and messaging, and your final view supports real, face-to-face contact.
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Your points are on topic: speed, long distance contact, less face-to-face time, and social isolation all relate to the question.
Coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear beginning, two main body parts, and an ending.
Coherence and cohesion
Each body part has a main idea and includes an example, which helps the reader follow your writing.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern communication
  • social interactions
  • email
  • messaging
  • superficial connections
  • face-to-face interactions
  • emotional well-being
  • social skills
  • genuine relationships
  • technology integration
  • healthy relationships
  • balance
  • distant communication
  • impact on social lives
  • traditional communication methods
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