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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps provide key information about the changes that have taken place on an
island
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 before and after
construction
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the construction
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 stage to build tourist facilities. Generally speaking, it is clear from the layouts that the
island
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have
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has
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 undergone substantial development.
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, in the first
layout
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layout,
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 we can see that the
island
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 was
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a green
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green
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green,
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 undeveloped area with a landscape of trees
in
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on
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 the eastern and western sides,
whereas
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,
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apply
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 in the second layout, we can notice that the
island
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 has become a developed place with many services.
To begin
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 with, the first map shows that the
island
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 was empty of buildings and facilities
with
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, with
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 groups of palms.
In contrast
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, the second map shows new brand facilities that have
constructed
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been constructed
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such
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, such
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 as
reception
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a reception
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 area in the middle of
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island
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the island
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,
restaurant
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a restaurant
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in
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on
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 the northern side and two accommodation buildings
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on
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 the eastern and western sides of the
island
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.
Pier
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The pier
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 is constructed to connect the ships with the
island
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, and there are two new ways for
footpath
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footpaths
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 and vehicle
track
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tracks
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • before and after
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • natural features
  • network of cottages
  • footpaths
  • recreational areas
  • pristine environment
  • organized lodging facilities
  • strategically positioned
  • delineated pathways
  • untouched nature
  • accessibility
  • isolated island experience
  • enhanced transportation options
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