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The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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 graph displays the difference in
museum
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 visits between the months of June and October
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2015. Most
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 visits were in the month of August ( more than 600000 people), followed by September. Across the year,
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British
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museum
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 was the most visited (with
minimum
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vistors
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visitors
 being more than 400000).
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National
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, the National
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museum
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 was the least visited throughout the year ( with maximum visits not even reaching the 400000 figure). The
month
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 of June and July had similar statistics
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 almost 400000 visitors visiting
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,
British
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 and Science museums. October was
slighly more busy
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slightly busier
 with a greater number of people
visting
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visiting
 the
British
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museum
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Museum,
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 other museums were
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 to June and July.
Finnaly
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Finally,
 September was the
most busy
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busiest
 month after August
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 more than 400000 people visiting the
British
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 and
Scince
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Science
museum
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, british with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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