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The chart below shows the percentage of land area affected by desertification in three different regions of the world in 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of Land Area Affected by Desertification

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The chart below shows the percentage of land area affected by desertification in three different regions of the world in 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of Land Area Affected by Desertification
The chart displays the percentage of land area affected by desertification in 1990 and 2010 across the four regions: North America, Europe,
Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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 and
Australia
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Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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 recorded the highest desertification across all figures, with 1990 showing a quarter of the land area affected and 2010 having a
third,
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presenting a gradual increase in desertification in the
Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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 category.
Secondly
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Australia
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 was the second-highest in 1990 (15%),
while
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 North America had 12%, with Europe having the lowest percentage (9%).
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, in 2010, it had a higher ratio than in 1990 in 3 out of 4 categories
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Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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 had 32%, North America and
Australia
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 followed with 15%,
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 Europe was lower at 11%. In every category, 2010 was higher than 1990 by around 3-10%, with the only exception being
Australia
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, which was 2% lower than in 1990.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sub-saharan, africa, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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