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the chart below shows the total number of minutes ( in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catogories, from 1995-2002

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the chart below shows the total number of minutes ( in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catogories, from 1995-2002
The
line
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 graph provides key information about the
overall
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number
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 of
minutes
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 of telephone calls in the United Kingdom
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.
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 The types of calls are divided into three categories throughout the period 1995 to 2002. The units are measured in billions.
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, it is clear from the
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 graph that the local - fixed
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 has the highest
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 of
users
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 among the other types of telephone,
whereas
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 mobile has the lowest
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 of
users
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 throughout the whole period. In 1995,
users
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 spent above 70 billion
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 when they used local
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apply
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fixed
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fixed-line
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, and the
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 of use gradually increased during the years
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 its peak in 1999.
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, the
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 slightly dropped between 2000
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 2002. Regarding mobile
users
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, they spent below 5 billion
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 in 1995, but the
spending
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time
started
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spent started
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 to increase to reach above 40 billion
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 by 2002. For national and international calls, the time spent increased
among
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over
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 the years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, number, minutes, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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