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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The plans below
illustrates
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 how a port harbour looked in the past, more specifically in the year 2000. And how it looks nowadays.
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Overall
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, in the past, the Porth Harbour was less
tourists attractive
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, with smaller spaces to receive visitors.
Furthermore
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, there was just one dock between ferries.
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It is clear that
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 the old infrastructures were similar
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 nowadays.
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, they tried to modernise it regarding
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over
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It seems that
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Body paragraph 7
the years. So, they constructed another place to shower and have access to the toilets.
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Also
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 they have made some modifications,
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, they changed the old “fishing boats” areas to the “Marina” area that welcomes private yachts
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 is reserved
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for
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 premium clients.
Conclusion
They decided to add some roads
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second
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 parking
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 cars, just next to the private boat space.
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, a special location opened
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 “café and shops” dedicated for the tourists to rest in a calm place.
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, they used the disused castle to create a new hotel, privatising the public beach, creating a more exclusive location for the guests.

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task response
Give a clearer main view in the first paragraph. State the biggest changes, such as more tourist places, a marina, a second car park, shops, and a hotel.
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Make sure every change is fully clear. Say where each new place is and what it replaced. For example, explain that the marina took the place of the fishing boat area.
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Do not add ideas that are not shown on the plans, such as “premium clients”, “exclusive”, or “calm place”. Describe only what can be seen.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: introduction, overall view, then one body paragraph for changes near the water and one for changes on land.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with clear time words: “In 2000”, “Today”, “In contrast”, and “Also”. Avoid starting many sentences with “Additionally” or “In addition”.
coherence and cohesion
Write full sentences and avoid note-like parts. The last sentence of the first body paragraph stops after “regarding”, so the idea is not complete.
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You identify several key changes, including the marina, new shower and toilet area, extra car park, shops, and hotel.
coherence and cohesion
You include an overall paragraph and try to group the changes from the past and today.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “However”, “Also”, and “For example” show that you are trying to connect your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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