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The pie charts below Sho w the mos t common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen islands, according to a surrey of visitors.

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Introduction
The pie chart illustrates
percentages
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the percentages
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 of
most
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the most
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 common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen
islands
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Islands
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 in several sections.
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Overall
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, it's clear from the graph that
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the high
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 cost of living
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 half of the most common disadvantages pie.
Body paragraph 2
According to
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 what is shown
most
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, the most
 common disadvantages pie
have
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 4 sections. Weather, high cost of living , entertainment, and food quality. Weather
have
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 the highest figures with 50%, and the entertainment obtain 25%,
whereas
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 the food quality
take
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 around 10%. Which
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 is the lowest among all four sections.
Conclusion
In
term
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 of
most
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the most
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 common advantages
have
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,
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also
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there are also
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 four
type
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 of advantages. Which are the individuals, the scenery, good
acconmmodation
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accommodation
,
finaly
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finally
 culture. The people have the highest percentages with approximatley 42%, and the second highest one is the scenery with 35%. The culture and good accommodation have similar numbers
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 12% and 11% respectively.

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Give a clear main view that names both charts. For example, say that weather is the main bad point, while people and scenery are the main good points.
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Check all figures before you write. The first body says weather is 50%, but the overview says high cost of living is half. This gives two different main points.
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Compare key parts more clearly. Say that people are a little higher than scenery, and that culture and good places to stay are much lower.
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Do not add ideas that are not in the charts. Focus on the given groups and their shares.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction, overview, bad points, then good points. This will make the report easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph start with one clear idea. For example: 'The first chart shows the main bad points.' Then give the figures in a clear order.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a natural way: 'while', 'by contrast', 'also', and 'respectively'. Avoid starting many sentences with 'Which' or 'According to what is shown'.
coherence and cohesion
Write full sentences. For example, change 'In term of most common advantages have' to 'The second chart shows four main advantages.'
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You included the main groups from both charts and gave figures for most of them.
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You made useful comparisons, such as people being the largest good point and food quality being the smallest bad point.
coherence and cohesion
Your report has an introduction, an overall view, and separate parts for bad and good points.
coherence and cohesion
You used some helpful comparison words, such as 'whereas' and 'respectively'.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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