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The line graph shows the number of immigrants to 3 different countries (USA,Canada, Australia) from 1991 to 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph shows the number of immigrants to 3 different countries (USA,Canada, Australia) from 1991 to 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of
immigrants
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 in three different countries, namely the USA,
Canada
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 and
Australia
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 after 11-year period from 1991 to 2001.
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,
Canada
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 and
Australia
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 recorded a slight increase,
while
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 the opposite is true for the USA, where immigration experienced a downward trend despite remaining the highest
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. The number of
immigrants
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 in
Canada
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 and
Australia
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 remained relatively stable. Regarding the USA, the number of
immigrants
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 fluctuated throughout the period. The
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number
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 of
immigrants
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 started from approximately 1420
thousand
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 in 1991 to 1800
thousand
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 people in 1992. After hitting a peak, there was a strong fall to 1 million people in 1993. These figures went down steadily with some variation until the end of the survey, which
were
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 almost 900
thousand
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 individuals in 2001. When it comes to
Canada
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 and
Australia
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, the number of
immigrants
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maintained
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remained
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 stable after 11 years. In
Canada
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, the proportion of
immigrants
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 jumped slightly from 200
thousand
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 in 1991 to 450
thousand
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 people
at the end
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 of the period.
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 that,
Australia
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also
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maintained
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remained
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 unchanged. Beginning at 100
thousand
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 and ending up at 190
thousand
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 between 1991 and 2001.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words immigrants, canada, australia, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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