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Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
People
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 have different
views
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 about whether it is better to have
friends
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 who share similar
opinions
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 or those who sometimes disagree with them. In my opinion, friendships are generally easier to maintain when
people
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 share similar
views
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,
although
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 occasional disagreements can
also
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 be beneficial.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, having
friends
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 with similar
opinions
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 can make cooperation and communication easier.
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 is because
people
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 who share similar
views
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 are more likely to agree on their priorities and decisions.
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, they can make plans more quickly and spend less time resolving disagreements.
For example
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, when planning a trip,
friends
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 with similar preferences about budgets and activities may find it easier to organise their itinerary.
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 can reduce unnecessary arguments and allow them to enjoy their time together.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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,
friends
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 who have different
opinions
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 can help
people
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 develop critical thinking skills. Since individuals have different experiences, they may approach the same problem from different perspectives. When
friends
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 discuss these differences, they can identify weaknesses in their own arguments and consider ideas they might
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 overlook.
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, two
friends
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 discussing whether to study abroad may consider different factors,
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 as financial costs, career opportunities and family responsibilities. Through
such
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 discussions, they can make more informed decisions and become more open-minded.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
although
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 friendships with differing
opinions
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 can encourage critical thinking and personal growth, I believe that having
friends
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 with similar
views
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 is generally more beneficial because it makes communication and cooperation easier.
Nevertheless
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, occasional disagreements should still be welcomed, as they can help
people
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 understand different perspectives.

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task response
You discuss both views and give a clear view of your own. To make your view even stronger, say more clearly why shared views are more important than the gains from different views.
task response
Your examples fit the main ideas well. You could add one more real result of a friendship with different views, such as learning to respect the other person even when you do not agree.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear order: opening, one view, the other view, and a final view. Each part stays on one main point, so it is easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
Your link words, such as “On the one hand”, “On the other hand”, “For example”, and “In conclusion”, help the reader follow your ideas. Try not to use too many result links like “This is because” and “As a result” close together; you can sometimes join the ideas in one sentence.
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You answer every part of the question. Your own view is clear in both the opening and the ending.
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The trip plan and study abroad examples are clear, useful, and closely linked to your points.
coherence and cohesion
The four-part shape of the essay is strong and easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has a clear main idea, an explanation, and an example.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmonious
  • stress-free
  • disagreements
  • conflicts
  • reinforce
  • validate
  • comforting
  • reassuring
  • broaden your understanding
  • perspectives
  • challenge intellectually
  • think critically
  • personal growth
  • development
  • healthy debates
  • communication skills
  • mutual respect
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