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In many countries, a large amount of food is wasted by households and restaurants. What are the main reasons for this problem, and what measures can be taken to reduce food waste?

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Introduction
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 waste has become a serious issue in many countries.
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 problem has several causes, but there are practical measures that could help address it.
Body paragraph 1
One major reason for
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 problem is poor meal planning in households.
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 happens when families have
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long working
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, my uncle works more than 12 hours a day
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 he can go to the supermarket once a month. When he goes to buy stuff, he takes more than his family needs,
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 things may expire before they can be used. Another contributing factor is Restaurants prepare more
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 than needed, which can lead to losing large quantities of
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One effective way to address
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 issue is through shopping lists and meal planning.
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, preparing
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 based on customer demand could reduce the problem by making a schedule for the orders.
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, a new restaurant in the first week attracts more visitors than
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 the second week. If they prepare by order, they may not lose any money or
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Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 waste is mainly caused by households and restaurants.
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, planning the meals and preparing
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 could help reduce
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 waste.

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Answer both parts more fully. Give clear reasons for waste at home and in restaurants, then give a clear action for each reason.
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Make your ideas more exact. For example, explain that people buy too much because they do not plan meals, and food goes bad before they use it.
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The restaurant idea needs more detail. Say how staff can check past orders, make less food at quiet times, and give extra food to people in need.
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Use examples that clearly prove the main idea. The example about your uncle is useful, but make the link to food waste direct and easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an ending. Keep this shape, but make each body paragraph focus on one main point.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words well: “First”, “Also”, “For example”, “As a result”, and “In conclusion”. This will make the flow smoother.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to understand because the ideas are joined without clear links. Write shorter sentences. For example: “He buys more food than his family needs. Some of it goes bad before they can eat it.”
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Make the ending more complete. Name the main reasons and the main actions again, then state that these steps can cut food waste.
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You answer both the cause and action parts of the question.
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You use useful real-life examples from a home and a restaurant.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction clearly shows that you will discuss causes and ways to solve the problem.
coherence and cohesion
Each body paragraph has a main idea, which helps the reader follow your writing.
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