the following diagrams show a current map of peyton park and a plan for proposed changes. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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IELTS Writing Task Chart for the following diagrams show a current map of peyton park and a plan for proposed changes. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps of Peyton

Park

Use synonyms

show the current state and a

propose

Replace the word

proposal

to change the places for the new update of the

park

Use synonyms

. The lake and the parking lot

is noticeably does not

Correct word order

do not noticeably

show examples

change a lot It moved from the left side to the right side, and

also

Linking Words

they are new thing added to the lake

Linking Words

such

Punctuation problem

, such

show examples

the features

Check wording

apply

show examples

a swimming dock for

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

people who want to swim in the lake. The tennis court moved pretty far away from the west moved far to the east

Punctuation problem

. It

show examples

become

Wrong verb form

became

show examples

the entertainment part in Peyton

Park

Use synonyms

. Picnic areas are one of the

reason

Check wording

reasons

show examples

why they come to eat, talk, play together to enjoy their time. We can see

the

Correct word choice

that the

show examples

changes that

Check wording

apply

show examples

3 picnic tables have moved to the north. The Peyton

Park

Use synonyms

decided to add a playground

like the swing

Change preposition

with swings

show examples

, etc for the children to play joyfully and heard the laughter of parents watching their kids play.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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2
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

157 words

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