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The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided map presents a significant
transformations
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 in
layout
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 of a new supermarket in the town of Ellington before and after the construction of several facilities for public use.
Overall
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,
It
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 is evident that the area experienced a major
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 with the development of a massive infrastructure to
be
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 better tourism. Moving to the details,
One
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 of the most significant changes is the
branched
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branching
 of the three proposed locations(A, B and C).Starting with location A is a residential area, which is
puplished
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published
 in the
central
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centre
 of the supermarket.
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 area includes
a
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crucial zones
like
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,
traffic-free
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such as a traffic-free
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 zone and
park
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a park
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as the
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 individuals can enjoy their free time.
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right
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 side was allocated for the
country side
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countryside
which
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 is the second location of new branches in
supermarket
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the supermarket
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.
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on
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 the left
corner
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 it shows
for
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the airport building.Interestingly, all the new sites are useful and essential for the buyers over a long period.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proposed sites
  • supermarket
  • locations
  • central
  • outskirts
  • residential areas
  • transport hubs
  • proximity
  • major roads
  • landmarks
  • accessibility
  • competition
  • shopping district
  • industrial area
  • green spaces
  • logistic ease
  • isolated
  • densely populated
  • traffic
  • customer reach
  • expansion possibilities
  • accessibility
  • customer base
  • logistical convenience
  • recommend
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