Some people think that high salary is important when choosing a company to work for, while others think that good working atmosphere is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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is wages but there’s a substantial herd who still believe that a mere handsome salary can’t be
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nly factor of satisfaction unless it offers good
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culture and ambience. So, In
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I would like to portray both the perspectives and
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, outline my personal interpretation to it. On one side of the popular belief, for
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ajor chunk of the people, it’s
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uite prevalent dogma that money is the only solution to their existential problems.
Thus
, it creates an urge amongst them to incline towards seeking a job in a company rewarding high paychecks. And for
this
, they are ready to compromise with the
work
pressure and take
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ough call on commitments. Though,
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negotiates with one’s social life but can earn great monetary rewards and fulfil materialistic desires. On contrary to it, A significant part of
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ommunity still
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with a feeling that companies providing a better
work
environment transcends the monetary benefits and perks to them.
In addition
, they believe, it enhances the positive attitude and promotes good health. Which in return, creates social balance amongst them. In my judgment, both
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perspectives have a fair appeal. But, I would rather choose a job role in a company which promotes balance in income and working as it fosters an amicable rapport between professional and personal life. In conclusion, To lead a healthy lifestyle we need to maintain
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ood
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-life balance to promote ourselves socially, financially and in sound health.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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