Men and women employed in full-time jobs should share the responsibilities of household chores. Do you agree or disagree? Share relevant personal experiences.

In
this
twenty-
first
century,
people
are moving towards living
r
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ich lifestyle. To achieve
this
, they are now more dedicated
towards
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their
work
schedule.
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, it is not possible for one
people
in
c
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a

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urrent competitive market so,
this
days
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men and women both are working full
time
in their professionals to face their
expences
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expenses

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. Some group of
people
encouraging
this
habit and asking to
devide
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divide
decide

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their household
work
between them for better prospects. I
am completely agree
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with their speech. Working hard in long day shift and
then
spending
time
on household
work
can make a single
person
's life so
hactic
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hectic

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in different ways.
Firstly
, a
person
can be get retired physically easily due to
h
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eavy load of office
work
and
then
looking after their children or cooking food, or washing clothes.
This
can be even worse if only one
person
is looking after all
r
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outine
work
.
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, in India, girls are working so hard in
o
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the

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ffice and
also
taking care of cooking, and cleaning of
h
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the

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ouse after
work
.
Secondly
,
this
hard
time
can be converted
in to
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mental stress for the lonely worker due to less sleep, heavy responsibility at
work place
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workplace

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and
then
regular
work
of home can make
p
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a
the

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erson so sick mentally. Sometimes it can be eventually converted into more dangerous to their life while driving
c
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a
the

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ar or working with flame in
k
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the

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itchen.
Finally
,
s
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a
the

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tressed
person
could be left
j
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a
the

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ob or get fired from office and get fall
in to
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into

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financial issue due to their tired mind.
This
will result
into
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in

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, the aim will never get
fullfill
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for what
people
are working so hard to achieve it.
However
, working
like
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a team and
divding
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dividing

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all
house
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housework

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work
can drastically change the life of a family. There are several
benifits
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benefits

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of changing
this
pattern. The
top most
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topmost

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,
people
can
shared
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the
work
and can get quickly free from routine the
work
. They can enjoy
this
time
with
eachother
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each other

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and can learn new things. It will increase emotions between them and reduce mental stress. In
additon
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addition

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, in one research it is said, the
physically
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stress is always connected to mental strength. Sharing
work
can
also
release their physical body pain.
Moreover
, it is said that
,
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Children are often learning from their parents and with
this
strategy
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parents can teach them the
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teamwork

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work
.
Finally
, working together and helping
eachother
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each other

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inside the family can encourage other
people
to follow it. By
this
way,
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ouple can contribute indirectly
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a huge part in making
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ood society. In conclusion, it is good to expect good lifestyle and to achieve
this
, not only require hard
work
but
also
smart
work
and
this
only can
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by working together on common works.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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