Men and women employed in full-time jobs should share the responsibilities of household chores. Do you agree or disagree? Share relevant personal experiences.

In
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twenty-
first
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people
are moving towards living
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ich lifestyle. To achieve
this
, they are now more dedicated
towards
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their
work
schedule.
In addition
, it is not possible for one
people
in
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urrent competitive market so,
this
days
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men and women both are working full
time
in their professionals to face their
expences
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. Some group of
people
encouraging
this
habit and asking to
devide
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divide
decide
their household
work
between them for better prospects. I
am completely agree
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with their speech. Working hard in long day shift and
then
spending
time
on household
work
can make a single
person
's life so
hactic
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hectic
in different ways.
Firstly
, a
person
can be get retired physically easily due to
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eavy load of office
work
and
then
looking after their children or cooking food, or washing clothes.
This
can be even worse if only one
person
is looking after all
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outine
work
.
For example
, in India, girls are working so hard in
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ffice and
also
taking care of cooking, and cleaning of
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ouse after
work
.
Secondly
,
this
hard
time
can be converted
in to
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mental stress for the lonely worker due to less sleep, heavy responsibility at
work place
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and
then
regular
work
of home can make
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erson so sick mentally. Sometimes it can be eventually converted into more dangerous to their life while driving
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ar or working with flame in
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itchen.
Finally
,
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tressed
person
could be left
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ob or get fired from office and get fall
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financial issue due to their tired mind.
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will result
into
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, the aim will never get
fullfill
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fulfil
for what
people
are working so hard to achieve it.
However
, working
like
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a team and
divding
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dividing
all
house
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housework
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work
can drastically change the life of a family. There are several
benifits
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benefits
of changing
this
pattern. The
top most
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,
people
can
shared
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the
work
and can get quickly free from routine the
work
. They can enjoy
this
time
with
eachother
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each other
and can learn new things. It will increase emotions between them and reduce mental stress. In
additon
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addition
, in one research it is said, the
physically
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stress is always connected to mental strength. Sharing
work
can
also
release their physical body pain.
Moreover
, it is said that
,
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Children are often learning from their parents and with
this
strategy
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parents can teach them the
team
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work
.
Finally
, working together and helping
eachother
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each other
inside the family can encourage other
people
to follow it. By
this
way,
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ouple can contribute indirectly
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a huge part in making
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ood society. In conclusion, it is good to expect good lifestyle and to achieve
this
, not only require hard
work
but
also
smart
work
and
this
only can
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by working together on common works.
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