While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal
qualities
, rather than qualifications and
experience
. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples. Nowadays, we are
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how fast growth of numerous industries. Recruiting the best candidate is very difficult for many employers. How they can determinate
this
person is
b
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the

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est fit for
this
job? Some people
says
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say

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education
, certificate and
experience
is
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are

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more important than personal
qualities
. I think both of these components are important. At the outset, there are numerous reasons why both of these components are important but the most conspicuous one lies in the fact that if people will have great
education
and
experience
but not will have social skills how will be looking relation between them and potential clients ? How will be looking
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in
at

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relation with other team members when will be time to work together . Determination, discipline,
comunication
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communication

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skills are important to full team success. To explain another view I can use an example job like
p
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a
the

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ilot. For
pilot
is necessary to have
experience
,
education
and
also
have personal
qualities
. Personal
qualities
are important when they have contact with passengers and other team members, but when is some emergency situation personal
qualities
isn't enough. That time, most important is
education
about how
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an
the

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airplane
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aeroplane

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works, how looks procedure when is
e
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an

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mergency situation and big
pilot
experience
. In summary, both components are important depends
of
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on

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jobs . For cardiochirurg more important
is
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experiences

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experience
, for makeup maker and
pilot
experience
and social skills are important.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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