Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that requiring an applicant to provide additional personal
information
such
as hobbies or marital status is beneficial for the
employer
;
however
, many people disagree with
this
view and claim that
this
information
is useless and holds no value.
This
essay will elaborate on both points of view and present my opinion. On the one hand, there are grounds to believe that employers need more than just the professional
information
to better assess their prospective candidates. With increasing emphasis on collaborative work culture and
need
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the need
for every employee to fit into the team dynamics, collecting extracurricular and personal
information
will help the
employer
select the right candidates and match them with
right opportunities
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the right opportunities
.
For instance
, several applicants may be deemed fit for a marketing position based on their qualification and work history. Those among them having special interests in
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
and meeting people are certainly more suited for
this
position and an
employer
needs to ask about their hobbies to figure
this
out.
Nonetheless
, many of those who disagree with
this
argument doubt the authenticity of
such
information
provided in the job applications. They believe that the job applicants tend to make up some hobbies and interests just to impress the employers. According to a survey conducted by a student group from
London School
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the London School
of Economics, only 40% of the respondents of a survey gave genuine answers when asked about their extracurricular interests. In conclusion, while some are still doubtful of the veracity / truthfulness of
information
provided by candidates for a job position, it is believed that collecting
this
information
greatly helps an
employer
in better decision making. In my opinion, the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages, and
hence
, the more
information
an
employer
gathers about an applicant, the better the decision making process will be.

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