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Car ownership has increased rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Most people would agree that
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 ownership has increased in recent years.
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 is causing problems, especially in built-up areas. I think there are a
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 of ways that governments can aim to deal with
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. Many big cities in the world have traffic problems. These problems vary.
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, it is easy to drive around my city after 10am and before 5pm. Outside these hours, you have to allow double the usual time to reach your destination. Traffic jam happens at all times in some other cities. There are a
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 of
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 horns too. One of the best approaches governments can take in busy cities is to encourage the use of public transport.
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run too well
. People must be able to afford them too. Buses, trams and trains are good ways of getting around. If they are cheap and reliable, people will use them. Another approach is to try to stop people from entering the city.
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 can be done by building
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 parks and shopping centres outside of the city. Many cities around the world do
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 quite successfully. They even offer
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 bus transport into the centre. Governments can
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 run campaigns to encourage people to be less dependent on their cars.
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 of
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 trips involve very short journeys. These are often unnecessary. We all have a responsibility to look after our cities. Governments can do a
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 to improve the situation. They need to focus on encouraging people to consider alternatives to driving.
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