The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions in Edinburg.

The line graph describes changes in the proportion of tourists visiting four different attractions of Edinburgh, Scotland
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Aquarium, castle, zoo and festival) within 30 years from 1980 to 2010. In 1980, Festival of Edinburgh attracted the most visitors
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30% of tourist), followed by
castle
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the castle
and aquarium with 24% and 20% of visitors respectively. The figure of
zoo
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the zoo
a zoo
was only 10
% which
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%, which
was the lowest rate. In 2010, after 3 decades of changes,
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the number
of tourists visiting Castle remarkably increased and became the most attracted place for visitors with over 30% of tourists. Festival witnessed a slight decrease from 30% in 1980 to 27% in 2010. Proportion of tourists to aquarium in Edinburgh noticeably decreased and dropped to below 10% in 2010. The figure for visitors of
zoo
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the zoo
fluctuated around 12% in 20 years
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1980 to 2000) and
then
went up to 20% at the end of the period of time. In general, proportions of tourists of Scotland visited
Zoo
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the Zoo
and castle
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witnessed
upward trends from 1980 to 2010 while the
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for aquarium and festival went down in the same period of time.
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