The bar chart shows the difficulties people have when they move to a new country and how the problems vary according to people’s ages.

The greatest problem for young people aged 18 to 34 is managing
budget
Suggestion
budgets
, a problem experienced by 34
percent
of the people in
this
age
group.
However
, only 29
percent
of people over 55 face financial problems. Both of the older
age
groups find it hard to deal with health problems, with approximately 37
percent
. In comparison, the youngest
age
group finds
this
easier
Suggestion
easy
, and the percentage who have problems taking care of their health is lower, at 32
percent
,’
In contrast
to their
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
difficulties, only 2
percent
of people in the oldest
age
group have trouble with their children’s education.
However
,
this
figure is much higher in parents aged 35 to 54 who struggle to find suitable schools, at 19
percent
. In general, all
age
groups experience the same problems to some extent, but the percentage of middle
age
people who find health care
difficult
an excess of liabilities over assets (usually over a certain period)
deficit
is much higher than the others.
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