Behaviour in schools is getting worse. Explain the causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.

Nowadays, appearing many children in schools behave
that is
lack of discipline. Let solve
this issues
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this issue
these issues
that we need to consider the main reasons is causes of bad behave in schools quickly – family background, disruptive, large classes, their parents and the
internet
are the results of bad behaviour in schools. Some students
has
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have
have had
are having
a bad family background and their parents abused them day by day.
On the other hand
, shaping a child’s personality either negative or positive through their parents.
For example
, the father is a
drunkard so
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drunkard, so
he always has
smell
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a smile
a smell
and do not awake that leads to
he
that male; objective male pronoun
him
his
regularly yell at the kid and even damage to his child.
This
reason
affect
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affects
the young students overwhelmingly that make them has a bad behaviour in schools
such
as conflict with others, against the command of teachers and so on.
Additionally
, the
internet
is the one of the reasons leads to a child have a negative attitude to the rules of
school
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the school
. Generally, there is no denying that the
internet
has no a positive side as everything usually that there are two good or bad sides.
However
, if their parents do not teach them how to use it properly on
study
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the study
or effective entertainment, the kid will be
impact
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the impact
by
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of
the bad side of the
internet
.
For instance
, today on the
internet
has a lot of violent videos or even relating to extremist ideas that could influence to
childrens’ mind
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a child’s mind
child’s mind
the child’s mind
children mind
.
Moreover
, it is not only the kid watched
it but
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it, but
also
their peers at
school
. Now,
this
is a time to organize a plan to solve
this
condition. The solution is the
school
that ought to have a meeting with the kids’ parents to tackle
this
problem as to be strict and not flexible with their kids. Or take care of the students, who has the bad parents as the government and
school
should co-operate to isolate these kids from their parents, taking them to other friendly family to bring up. In conclusion, these are essential things to tackle the anti-social behaviour of the children at
school
by
carry
Suggestion
carrying
out effective deals between schools and parent to definite their mind properly.
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