As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there are a number of heated
agruments
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
arguments
agreements
among
parties
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the parties
about whether or not enterprises generate profit
also
need have responsible with
community
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the community
.
On
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In
my view, I completing agree that all enterprises should run
business
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the business
a business
in
socially responsible manner
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a socially responsible manner
.
Firstly
,
community
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the community
where have provided human resources for companies. Human resource is a most significant factor which
assure
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assures
sustainable development
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the sustainable development
of companies. By the way, providing scholarships for exceptional individuals is a clever way to find the potential talented staffs.
That is
not only a low-cost marketing
project but
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project, but
also
the wise method that
make
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makes
potential customer have impressed with corporations, that
also
mean the outlet of their product will get a encourage from the marketing.
For
example Hyundai
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example, Hyundai
vinashin
a resident of Venice
Venetian
shipyards
is
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are
the most
building shipyard
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building, shipyard
in Asian where have annually offered for foreign scholarships for students have good achievement. Not
surprise
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surprisingly
surprising
, almost of those students become staffs at company after they get graduate, but those students are always
back bone
a central cohesive source of support and stability
backbone
of
this
company.
Secondly
, all corporations attempt to achieve ultimate profit that
also mean
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also means
the increasing value income from tax for government. The government will use that money to invest
to
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in
education, health care, traffic, army, environment. The development of all above factors will establish the wonderful environment for growing of the corporations.
For
instance in
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instance, in
2017, the highly unexpected value
from
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of
for
tax that assist the government have built a large number of
highway
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highways
. These
highway
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highways
have made the traffic more convenient
also
save a numerous of time to transportation for corporations. Summarize, the social responsibilities
is
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are
one important part of mission of
business
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the business
. The increasing profit will make companies more community responsibilities
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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