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Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and do different kinds of jobs. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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I definitely agree with the notion that individuals should
change
 their
career
 at least once in life. A number of arguments surround my opinion.
To begin
 with there are some strong benefits that can come from a
career
change
.
One
 of the major benefits of changing careers is money. People may make more per year than they did with their previous
job
.
This
 can help to lessen the financial burden of an individual or family.
Secondly
, a
career
change
 brings opportunity to learn new skills. They will have to learn new actions and meet new expectations.
This
 general education
that is
 formed through a
career
change
 will be beneficial in the future. What is more, those who have a wide range of careers under their belt will have more
job
 security in the long run.
Instead
 of being proficient at
one
career
 path, a person can be proficient with two or even more. If he loses his
job
, he can seek out jobs in different
career
 fields, as opposed to
one
career
 field.
Therefore
, his chances of landing a new
job
 are greater than those who have simply held
one
career
.
Finally
, a
career
change
 is good for breaking the monotony. It is psychologically true that whenever a person takes his
first
job
, he is usually excited about it; but in the course of time, his interest wanes and soon he begins to suffer from an excruciating boredom. A
career
change
 fills him with new excitement that propels him into working with renewed interest and enthusiasm. To conclude, I would like to reiterate my opinion that a
career
change
 has many benefits and
instead
 of sticking to
one
job
Accept comma addition
job, one
one
 should
change
career
Suggestion
careers
 at least once in life if not more times.
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