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Some people say that what children watch influence their
behaviour
Pandit other believe the amount of time they spend on
television
influence their
behaviour
most discuss both view and give your opinion
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The behaviour
Behaviour
is the way which persons are
respond
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responding
to
particular situation
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a particular situation
the particular situation
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person
to
person
because it
change
according to
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person
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person
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changes
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adults
are influenced by others habit and some are
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changing
their by watching TV or mobile phone I discuss both view in details
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preceding all others in time or space or degree
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the majority
a majority
of individuals think that teenagers are influenced by what
the
people in general
they
see.
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are changing
have changed
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habits, according
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in school the youngest will try to be like
elders
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elder
one they will try to adopt their habits like violent
behaviour
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if they watch
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the conflict
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changing
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on
adults
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adult
adults'
adult's
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can easily influenced what they can see and hear on
television
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adults
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bonding with families.
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spite of
this
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teenager
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learning
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programs
which gain the knowledge and increase the education level of the children.
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