some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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people
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People
have contrasting views about whether we should encourage citizens live in rural areas (
instead
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of cities) to tackle the
traffic
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congestion and
transportation
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problems or not.
while
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While
in a certain extent, I agree with that idea;
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, there
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are
still some other problems need to be solved in
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situation. There are no doubts about that moving people from cities to
countryside
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the countryside
or suburbs could address
trafic
the aggregation of things (pedestrians or vehicles) coming and going in a particular locality during a specified period of time
traffic
and
transportation
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problems. Owing to the fact that people tend to live in cities to have
better life condition including
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the better life condition, including
the better life condition including
a better life condition including
brilliant job opportunities, great educational system and stunning welfare.
This
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tendency leads to some problems is that
transportation
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system in many cities can not be able to serve the huge number of people, too much vehicle on the small roads. To solve
this
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problem, big companies should be replaced from cities to
countryside
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the countryside
, and government's rural areas should provide more infrastructures to give sufficient life condition to citizens.
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, people who remain in cities could have more space on streets and avoid
stuck
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sticking
on
roads
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the roads
for a long time. Despite the argument above, there are still several issues that
traffic
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and
transportation
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need to be tackled. One of the main reasons is that there are not only the number of people join
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traffic but
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traffic, but
also
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existing problems with the awareness of people, as we know in some cities people get in
traffic
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with very low behaviour. Many people just care about their demands,
therefore
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, they break laws on the roads
such
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as ignoring
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lights.
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, with
weak
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the weak transportation system
transportation
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system
,
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,
the point here is not about the number of people on the streets
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governments should improve the quality of streets.
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, in my cities, Ha Noi, we have some old streets with terrible surfaces that could make some
suddent
happening without warning or in a short space of time
sudden
student
accidents to people. In conclusion, immigration of people from cities to suburbs is a great solution for
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circumstance,
besides
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, governments should convince people
joinning
the act of bringing two things into contact (especially for communication)
joining
gaining
traffic
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in more discipline.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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