Some people think the government founding should not be used for supporting art and culture, others think supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population anf the culture. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

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Many people believe that the government should not invest in
act
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activities
and
culture
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while others think that money can be used for cultural activities because it bring advantage of the population and
culture
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. In
this
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essay,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will examine both
agruments
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
arguments
and
then
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give my personal opinion. On the one hand, some
peple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
suppose that
art
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and
culture
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should be supported by the government. Many
form
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forms
of
art
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, especially painting, each
pictures
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picture
is a meaningful story that painter
want
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wants
to deliver
massages
a communication (usually brief) that is written or spoken or signaled
messages
about life. Saving ancient pictures is
way
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a way
that can help people cherish the beauty of
culture
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.
For example
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, Viet Nam's authority built Ho Chi
minh
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Minh
museum which
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museum, which
show
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shows
pictures about Ho Chi Minh's life when he lived. He has a great president.
Therefore
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,
art
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and
culture
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touch
impart skills or knowledge to
teach
us to value spirit and contact individual person with
community
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the community
.
On the other hand
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, the
others
writes (books or stories or articles or the like) professionally (for pay)
authors
believe that the authority should not spend budget to support
art
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and
culture
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. There are more important projects.
For example
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,
healthcare
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health care
and education put on top because
this
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factors
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factor
are directly
impact
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impacting
on
population
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the population
. To be specific, the government could hold free health
examinition
the act of examining something closely (as for mistakes)
examination
examinations
twice a year for the poor, especially older.
Morever
in addition
Moreover
,
origanizing
create (as an entity)
organizing
organising
educational events about sex education, educational
eproduction
the act or process of producing something
production
in the rural areas, which have not modern education system.
This
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policies
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policy
will improve population and grow economic of the country. In conclusion, it is
underunderstandable
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why many people think that allocating to cultural activities,
however
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that the
founding
financial resources provided to make some project possible
funding
should not be spent for it because there are some necessary issues which need to care of the authority.
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