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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The above chart illustrates how a machine generates
electricity
 from
wave
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waves
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 and the options of
location
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the location
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 where the
machines
 should be installed to induce
maximal
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the maximal
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 and minimal
amount
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amounts
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 of energy. Regarding the process of
electricity
 manufacture, wave movements accelerate
water
 levels contained in the ground chamber, which triggers
air
 pressure to flow up,
accordingly
 making the first turbine spin. Simultaneously, the other source of
air
 from the top of the machine
also
 flows down, activating the
second
 turbine. The
air
 in and out continuously occurs in the chambers in order for the unstoppable operation of the two turbines. Apparently, the stronger wave movements are, the greater
air
 pressure is created, which definitely yields
more
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 significant amount of
electricity
. The below image clearly demonstrates the possible locations for setting up the
electricity generating
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machines
as well as
 their cost estimations. Smaller
machines
 that consume a handful of money in
installation
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 are suggested to be situated near the coast where low levels of ocean
water
 are stored.
As a result
,
insignificant
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 amount of
electricity
 would be generated.
In contrast
, the huge
machines
 whose
water
 containers are spacious should be located in deep
water
 areas and far away from the coastal line.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, machines, water, air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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