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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Companies
are varied
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vary
 in terms of dress code. Some organizations prefer elegant clothes.
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, some others ignore employee’s appearance and focus on their productivity. I think what
staff
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 should wear is must be related to the kind of
work
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 they perform.
First
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 of all, employees who
work
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 in front of clients and become very close to them must be well dressed. The people whom represent the enterprise have to reflect an elegant image since
client’s decision
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the client’s decision
 is affected directly by enterprise representative.
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, receptionists are the
first
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 persons who meet any possible customer in a hospital.
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, the quality of the medical facility and health practitioners will be measured by the receptionists look. On the other side,
staff
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 who
work
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 outside offices in the field must dress practical clothes to enable them
work
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 in a comfortable way.
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, maintenance
staff
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 in a medical
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 must wear a comfortable pants and shirts since they need to move a lot between the buildings.
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 type of workers
is typically be
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has typically been
typically is
 in touch with their colleagues not the clients which illustrates that they do not need to be very well dressed. In conclusion,
staff
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 appearance should be related to their positions in the organization and their objectives as well.
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, enterprise’s higher management must determine some suitable clothes for each class of employees based on their job titles and the type of
work
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 they perform.
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 style will help the organization
to meet
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meet
 high quality level without affecting its image.
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