Some people think that the main factors influencing a child’s development these days are things such as television, friends, and music. Others believe that the family still remains more important. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

While it is believed by many that TV programme, friendship and song are the major elements impact on the development of a child in today's life, others think that parents obviously play the most important role in their offspring growth.
This
essay will examine both sides before declaring a preference. On the one side, there is no doubt that there are many factors external to
family
Suggestion
the family
a family
families
that significantly influence children as he gets older. Televisions and the Internet,
for instance
, can be considered to be some of those things. Youngsters nowadays have access to these much more than those in the past, who only could get information through radios or books. In
addtion
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
, friends
also
have a major effect as children incline to mimic their
sheers
assets belonging to or due to or contributed by an individual person or group
shares
seers
who they are
admire
Suggestion
admired
or respect.
This
can be
positve
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
behaviour,
nevertheless
, it can be negative
such
as smoking or taking drugs.
On the other hand
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that family members have the most important impact. As
juvelniles
of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people
juveniles
spend nearly most of their time with their family, especially in their early years, they easily being affected by their parents' actions and words. The proof of
this
can be seen in the differences between some children in the same class and watching the same TV shows. Those that grow up in a warm and close environment would achieve more confidence and security in adult life, whilst
those
plural of "this"
these
are brought up in dysfunctional homes often eventually have strange behaviour and have problems with themselves. In conclusion,
although
social factors play a part in influencing a child' development, I believe that it is
family
Suggestion
a family
that can provide a supportive, secure and nurturing environment, which is crucial to the way that a child becomes an adult.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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