the government investments in arts , music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extend do you agree with this statement

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Governmental payment varies between paying its money on arts and public services, so there are two

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contradictory

arguments. Some people accept that

government

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must pay its money in

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public

services only, while others see that

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should invest

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arts

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the arts

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essay will discuss the different two

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a mental position from which things are viewed

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and discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both methods.

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, arts and music can teach people to be quiet, calm and how to acquire values from the artists. Teachers in schools must teach children what is the importance of teaching those. Because kids and adults will know the culture of other countries. In Egypt there are a

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of examples that illustrate how my country is interesting in music as Omar Khairat

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s Orchestra that admires millions of people. There are

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lot

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of tourists that come to watch Om Kalthom

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s and

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Abed

Elhalim, s parties. Hamlet is

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an example of arts which is a beautiful art and famous around the world.

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there are many advantages of spending a

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of money on arts, there are disadvantages that come when the general funds invest in awful arts that will affect the

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generations. To summarize the

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point, there are a

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of important things to know when the local

government

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spend on arts

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as tasting the beautiful arts and earn

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not of long duration; having just (or relatively recently) come into being or been made or acquired or discovered

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knowledge about other countries.

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, local

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should invest

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should also invest

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in public services as bridges, fix the old roads and discover new roads. Expending on these methods is huge and enormous. The advantage of investing in roads will decrease the accidents in

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the streets

;

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will lead

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to passing

between cities easily.

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the time spends when we ride trams is shorter than cars in rush hour. Briefly the

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and important thing to local

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is investing in public services. In conclusion, expending on arts and general services are important, but the

government

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must increase the weight that

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is expended

is expending

expends

on the

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approach. So I strongly agree that it must invest in two methods.

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the government investments in arts , music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extend do you agree with this statement

Your opinion

Some people think that illegal internet downloads are having a negative effect on the music industry. Others feel that they have little or no impact on artists. Discuss both views and give own opinion.

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In many countries governments are investigating in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think is an appropriate use of government money?

Human activities have negative effects on the environment. Some people believe it is too late to take measures to prevent animals and plants from dying out. Others think actions should be taken to improve the situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.