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Some countries spend lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion?

#countries #money #bicycle #usage #traffic #congestion
Nowadays,
world
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the world
 is suffering from
traffic
 congestion. To eradicate
this
 problem, many countries spent
huge amount
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a huge amount
 of money for the easier
usage
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use
 of
bicycle
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bicycles
the bicycle
. In my opinion, Yes, bicycle
usage
 is the best solution. As it
reduce
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reduces
traffic
 and accidents and
moreover
, they are
environmental
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environmentally
 friendly. To embark upon,
road
 accidents and
traffic
 problems are the major issues of any countries in the world. Driving vehicles on a high speeds leads to
road
 accidents. People drive
on
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at
 a high speed to reach quickly to their
destination but
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destination, but
 a small miss calculation on
road results
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the road results
into
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in
 accidents. One clear example, In India approximately 8
road
 accidents
happens
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happen
 daily. The
usage
 of vehicles
are
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is
 more and more due to which there is so much
traffic
 on roads.
especially
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Especially
, during peak hours.
the
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The
usage
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use
 of bicycles for sure lower the rate of
traffic
 problem and
also
road
 accidents. Bicycles
does not need
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do not need
 a space like other vehicle. One of
the clear
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the clearest
clearest
 example is the space which two
vehicle
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vehicles
occupies
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occupy
 it can easily
replaced
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replace
 by the more than eight bicycles. Eight bicycles
can be ride
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can ride
can be ridden
 at the same time on the
road
 by replacing two vehicles.
Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, speed limit of bicycles is very less as a
results there
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result, there
result there
 would not be any
road
 accidents. Bicycles
does not release
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do not release
 harmful smoke like other vehicles they are
environmental
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environmentally
 friendly. To conclude, I would like to reiterate that for
healthy life
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a healthy life
 for a citizen. Government should spend
good amount
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a good amount
 for the comfortable
usage
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use
 of bicycles as they reduce major
road
 accidents and
traffic
 jams and
furthermore they
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furthermore, they
 are the best solution in term of keeping environment clear and healthy.

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