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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Archaeological remains have always been a rich source of region's diversity. Some people are of the opinion that useful information can be unravelled if we dig into
history
 while others regard
history
 as useless entity. I believe that
history
 provides us with numerous indispensable facts which we are unable to appreciate
otherwise
.
This
 essay will look into both views. Man's thirst for the knowledge of
history
 is unquenchable. By unfolding various archaeological marvels, man has been able to carve his future better than his past.
For instance
 l with discovery of
architectural remains
Suggestion
the architectural remains
 of Harrapa
,
Accept space
,
modern man has been able to design buildings that are resistant to natural calamities like earthquakes and storms. With the
moto
a favorite saying of a sect or political group
motto
 of ‘People who don’t learn from
history
 have to repeat it’, archaeologists have been able to excavate valuable objects. Clay pots,
for example
 discovered from the ancient Mohn
jo
Suggestion
Jo
daru
Suggestion
Daru
dare
 have allowed us to create utensils of several sorts. Akin to
this
 discovery water canal system discovered from Mughal empire still serves as a useful mode of irrigating farm fields.
However
, there are people who think that
history
 has no value in our daily lives. They believe that squandering billions of dollars in exchange of few non productive items is not justified. They think that money should rather be invested in
future
Suggestion
the future
 of
man kind
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
mankind
.
For instance
, creating spaceships and rockets that have
tendency
Suggestion
tended
 to bring us resources and habitats from other planets, is more useful than wasting money on learning lessons from the past. To conclude, excavating into
past
Suggestion
the past
 is resourceful to
human race
Suggestion
the human race
 as
history
 can many valuable lessons that
cant
can not
can't
 be learned in any other way.
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