Some people think the increasing business and cultural contact between countries brings many positive effects. Others say it causes the loss of national identities. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

There is an increasing concern about the effects of
globalization
. Some believe that
globalization
surely benefits most countries in different aspects
such
as economics, education and politics; others,
however
, argue that it has negative consequences on national identities. In my view,
globalization
not only boosts economic
development but
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development, but
generally has positive effects on national identities.
First
, it is obvious that business contacts around the world contribute a lot to effective development. Entrepreneurs and business owners, from foreign countries, invest a substantial amount of money as well as technology into infrastructure and create many job opportunities for local residents, which
consequently
improve people's living standards.
That is
the reason why many countries make laws and policies to encourage international business and investment.
Moreover
, with multicultural communication, national identities are more expressed to the outside world and get respected and appreciated by people from different cultures and social background.
For example
, water puppet has been introduced and been known in many countries recently.
Therefore
, Vietnamese identity has been enhanced and has impressed many people through
this
kind of performance which uniquely belongs to Vietnam. Those who
harbor
a sheltered port where ships can take on or discharge cargo
harbour
the view that international collaboration between countries may threaten national identities may argue that youngsters start following western country trends without understanding their pros and cons. Millennials nowadays eat hamburgers, drink coffee, work in skyscrapers and even speak English often,
fueling
about to be mentioned or specified
following
fuelling
a lifestyle similar to that in New York. But I think that
this
just mirrors
modern lifestyle
Suggestion
the modern lifestyle
and does not mean that we are losing our cultural heritage. To protect our national identities does mean that every Vietnamese people should drink tea every day and use chopsticks at every meal. In sum,
globalization
do play
Suggestion
does play
an important role in a country's development. Meanwhile, a more prosperous economy facilitates the preservation and recognition of national cultures and identities worldwide.
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