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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

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Why do many smart people become jobless? In almost all parts of the world, the number of qualified graduates increases significantly, but many of them have no jobs yet. Personally,
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 shows an indication of slowing economic
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, so the best way to overcome
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 problem is the government should attract more investors to start up businesses in the
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. The growing numbers of certified graduates who do not have works depict low prosperity, especially in the
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's economy. If a
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 faces
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 situation, it will impact on the availability of employment.
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, according to a daily newspaper, Indonesia has around 700,000 graduations that still struggle to find jobs since the economic
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 does no achieve the target due to lack of investment from other countries.
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 demonstrates how economic
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 contributes to unemployment of
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the highly
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 qualified scholars.
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 does not mean that it cannot be tackled. The best step that should be done by the authority to reduce unemployment is by inviting many new shareholders from abroad to open multinational companies in its own state.
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, Dubai, the largest and most populous city in the United Arab Emirates, has succeeded in making international investors invest their money, so it causes an economic improvement in
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country
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. By that, Dubai had constructed and attracted world attention through large construction projects and sports events,
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, the world's tallest building, the Burj Khalifa.
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 leads to a decrease in the number of many highly qualified graduates without employment. To sum up, even though many people who have graduated from tertiary are still jobless, I believe that the government ought to cooperate with other investors from overseas to develop economic
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