Nowadays more and more young people hold the important positions in the government. Some people think that is a good thing while others argue that it is not suitable. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In some regions, a great number of
youngers
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
are elected
for
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to
key roles in the government. While some people claim
that is
unfair compared to the
olders
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
; many others, myself included, believe it is beneficial for our society.
However
, I will take these two
viewpoint
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viewpoints
into consideration when discussing them in
this
essay.
To begin
with, the fact of the matter is that youngsters are mostly
lack
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lacking
of real experience as they have never challenged or dealt with a great many difficult situations.
Moreover
, a tiny part of young people are irresponsible, pass the buck when making mistakes and have a signal for capitalizing their roles. Based on those viewpoints, a host of people
criticize
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criticizes
many young leaders and are not in favour of their current positions.
In addition
, with the shortage of social skills, these young authorities can have difficulty in solving international problems or establishing the legislation. Gradually, their decisions can stagnate the economic recession and pose a threat to everyone's income
as a result
.
On the other hand
, the youngsters
also
have some advantages with regard to their age and high passion. Unlike the
olders
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
older
, they have a very long period to develop and complete themselves step by step. They have their youth
hence
they may be not hesitate to take
risk
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risks
in making decisions and choosing the most ultimate path. By virtue of being born in the industry 4.0 coupled with many significant breakthroughs in technology, the young people can have more chance to learn, become modern, creative and sophisticated.
Additionally
, one of the key factors contributing to the success in any occupations is the passion.
Therefore
, the working productivity of many young leaders
are
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is
always high and effective. In conclusion, the question whether or not young people should hold many inevitable roles in the government creates a lot of attraction from
people but
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people, but
I want to reaffirm that having many young leaders can be beneficial for us due to some aforementioned reasons.
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