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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true to say that fossil fuels are still our main source
ot
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
energy
 today, and as more countries develop their industries and their economies, the scale of their use continues to grow.
However
, we are now well aware
ot
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 the consequences of relying on
this
energy
 source for our natural environment. Global warming and the damage to the protective ozone layer are caused by carbon dioxide and other by-products of fossil fuels So I certainly agree that these problems are
global
Suggestion
more global
 rather than national ones. They threaten our whole planet and no action by a single country could solve them
Furthermore these
Accept comma addition
Furthermore, these
 problems are urgent as nobody knows when our natural world will be so damaged that it will no longer be able to support us. While some countries already use safer alternative
energy
 sources,
such
 as wind, water or solar power, it seems that there has not been
sufficient investment
Suggestion
a sufficient investment
 in developing the technology to make
such
 alternatives viable for all So it should definitely be a global priority to invest in
such
 research and development. Of
course there
Accept comma addition
course, there
 are other global priorities that we
also
 need to address,
such
 as poverty and disease. But while it may be the case that these problems are just as important as the
energy
 problem, there is a sense that time is ticking away for our planet and any solutions to the
energy
 issue will take some time to achieve. So in conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would agree that finding alternatives to fossil fuels is certainly the most pressing global priority, if not the most important one
for
Suggestion
in
 our world today.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • safe alternatives
  • global priority
  • limitations
  • drawbacks
  • potential benefits
  • government
  • international cooperation
  • investing
  • research and development
  • challenges
  • obstacles
  • transitioning
  • individuals
  • businesses
  • adopting
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