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In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many children are tending to be
obesity
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obese
 and unhealthy. There is an idea that the government should be responsible for
this
 problem. I really disagree. The fatness
is depent
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depends
is depend
 on the children and their parents.
Firstly
, they eat too much fat food, milk tea and do less exercise. Their energy is much more day by day lead to corpulence.
Secondly
, their parent
spend
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spends
 less time
to
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with
 them or pamper them.
Therefore
, they can do anything they like, eat what they want and have no healthy diet. For these
reason
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reasons
,
parent
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parents
a parent
the parent
 should have the
responsibility but
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responsibility, but
 not the
gvernment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
. They should take care of their offspring, educate them to have a healthy diet.
Moreover
, they should spend more time doing exercise with them, encourage them to have more phýsical activities. In conclusion, the role of parent is very important to reduce the fat children.
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